10种雅思考官看了想打人的雅思写作开头，你中了几个？

知道为什么你的雅思写作迟迟无法提分吗？？

学习了那么多技巧，动用了无数华丽辞藻，仍然万年5.5？

很有可能是因为，

那些让考官看了愤愤不已的开头，

恰好被你使用了！

今天，环小球带你来看下，

考官最讨厌的十种雅思写作开头分别是什么！

01. 中式英语

用中式英文开头，不仅会让考官看不懂，还暴露了你的语言功底，语料积累匮乏，是雅思写作中的大忌。比如：

写作主题：Thehappiest moment in your life

案例：In ourlife, there are always some moments which make yourheart flower opened angrily…

写作主题：Thepopulation problem

案例：Thepopulation problem is a very big problem. For example, in the city centers ofShanghai, we can always see people mountain people seathere.

02. 胡乱翻译中国俗语

胡乱翻译中国俗语会起反作用，毕竟考官对中国俗语并不“感冒”，使用不慎，更会引起考官反感。比如：

写作主题：Isit good to have a large family?

案例：I thinkit is good to have a large family. Because we Chinese believe a sentence: “Many sons, many lucks”…

写作主题：Doyou think one’scharacter is greatly influenced by his/her family?

案例：Chineseold words says very good: Dragon born dragon, phoenixborn phoenix, rat’s son can make hole…

03. 叙事啰嗦

开篇要主题清晰，上来啰啰嗦嗦表达不清，考官自然认为你的观点模糊，甚至不会表达 比如：

写作主题：Shouldcollege students be allowed to get married?

案例：Thistopic is very interesting. I’m very interested in talkingabout this topic. Because I’malso a college student and I’mnot married……

写作主题：Willmodern technology, such as the Internet, ever replace the book or the writingword as the sole source of information?

案例：Ok, thistopic is a very good topic. First, let me tell you astory: I have a friend, he likes go on the internet very much. Everyday, he uses internet to read news or play internet games. So we can see theinternet is more and more important in our daily life.

04. 偏离主题

文不对题自然会扣分，给考官留下的印象就是跑题，想想整体写作分数还会高么？比如：

写作主题：Itis said that nowadays one can‘tacquire the qualifications and quality essential to success through universityeducation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

案例：I thinkto success, we must have a lot of important qualities. To have these importantqualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English, music tools,and etc. We can learn these qualities from our teachers, our friends and frombooks. All in all, we can learn from many places.

05. 观点不明朗

雅思大作文很重要的一点就是你的逻辑性和观点，如果观点都不明确，后面的举例证明等都会缺乏说服力，自然分数也不会高。比如：

写作主题：Shouldcollege students be allowed to get married?

案例：I thinkthis topic is very hard to say. Because I amstill very little,only 17, and not married, so this topic is very difficult forme……

06. 语法错误不断

涉及到雅思写作评分标准中的语法多样性和准确性，语法错误不断自然会成为扣分点。比如：

写作主题：Ifchildren behave badly, should their parents acceptresponsibility and also bepunished?

案例：Aboutthis problem, my think is if children behavebadly, then parents arenot right. Because teach child is parent’s responsibility.

07. 意思重复

反复重复一个意思，让考官会觉得你并没有什么可以表达的，或者词汇表达能力有限，自然也会扣分。比如：

写作主题：Youropinion on DINK families

案例：Myopinion on DINK families is that DINK families is not agood thing. And it is a bad thing. It brings no benefits to our society andit is even sometimes harmful to our society.

08. 观点绝对化

考生在使用语言描述事物或者表达自己的观点时，应尽可能避免语言过于绝对化，更应该注意该语言中非绝对化表达方式的学习，这样才能尽显文章内容的客观性。比如：

写作主题：Theimportance of confidence

案例：In myopinion, confidence is the most important thing fora person. All the successful people in the world are full of confidence. Whilethose people who don’t haveconfidence, they all have failed.

09. 内容过分简单

考官想给你打分都没有内容，所以切记开头不要只写一两句话。比如：

写作主题：Theimportance of environmental protection

案例：Thisissue is surely very important, let’s talk about it!

10. 用词不当

用词不当会暴露你的词汇，而且评分标准中谈到“在不同的语境中，使用正确的词性；”所以在使用词汇的时候，正确性也是非常重要的。比如：

写作主题：Shouldcollege students be allowed to get married?

案例：I thinkcollege students should not be allowed to get married because they are veryyoung and so we can’t takethe responsibility to form a family.

小建议

1.开头切记不要用中式英语表达，多积累地道的英语表达。

2.表达的观点要客观明确，切勿模棱两可绝对化。

3.内容要清晰明了，切勿反复啰嗦，也不能一句话代之。

4.注意词性使用，减少语法错误，不要生搬硬套“华丽辞藻”。

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